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The sun, filtered to clotted cream yoghurt through early morning haze,
      hasn’t yet dried the grey dew, which I flick with white boots leaving
           a ski-trail from the patio to the files of bees, whose murmurs
                jog me back to an infant school assembly before the hymn.
                     My bees, quite used to me, take two squeezes of smoke
                            in this wet chill to appease their erinaceous slumber,
                                   save one lonely returnee who, heavy with cold
                                            and gossip, alights my held honeycomb
                                                    measling the others with her thrill.
                                                            Two more perfumed puffs to
                                                                    quell the riot and I find
                                                                          myself drifting in
                                                                                 sympathy –
                                                                                     to whence
                                                                                       ---------
                                                                                     she hailed.
                                                                             Where a gardener
                                                                  of fabled rusty masculinity
                                                         hefts pots of blooms at sparrowfart.
                                                  Across gardens she juggernauts directly,
                                           apple-blossom to hive, when fresh blooms
                                     alert her like hazard warning lights; she pelts
                              at the nearest brightest star, startling the gardener.
                       He recovers, musing at the rebouncing flower to murmur:
                 “Now then me ‘andsome. How about you find me a nice belle?”
            She purrs into the air away, leaving him agape at her compliance,
        before he shrugs in dismissal.
Now I awaken, to find I’ve finished my
   round of hives, but only recall a single memory of the chore, one bee -
The one that crossed my knuckles like a ring seeking the perfect finger.
©2006-2009 `AbCat
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Author's Comments

This is my competition entry for `imperfect's "In the end" poetry competition. [link]
The final line was taken from this piece by Nancy Willard, [link] as per competition guidelines.

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-11-29

The Messenger by *AbCat, a poem from the In the End competition, draws on a gorgeous palette of imagery and description for its purposes, coupled with an innovative structure. (Featured by `PoeticWar)

Comments


:iconmsjames:
Thus the need for proper formatting tools for Lit!
Must have been a pain to do that! :no:

be back to crit later...

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
:iconabcat:
I'm still having to jiggle it. I had a crisis when I noticed the finishing line differed from what it should have been.
:iconabcat:
If you happen upon my earlier draft in scraps, (it seems to have mysteriously vanished) the end line read - "The one that crawled across my knuckles like a ring seeking the perfect finger." So a lot of last minute editing occurred when I noticed that mistake. I think I've got it as neat as I can on here now.
:iconmsjames:
I actually like Crawled better, but I guess you can't use that since it has to match up exactly.

I need to work on mine sometime soon. :(

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
:iconkittyrose:
I like how you typed it in that shape. I could never have the energy, or the paitence, to do that.

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And I believe this may call for a proper introduction, and well
Don't you see, I'm the narrator, and this is just the prologue?
Panic! at the Disco
:iconabcat:
Worse than that, the size of the lettering differs in each format. I had to re-word it and look at it again, several times over, to get the shape reasonably straight. An absolute nightmare!
:iconabcat:
So do I. Oh well.
I'll look forwards to seeing your own... :-)
:iconmsjames:
Well, that's one of the reasons I didn't pick that line for mine, but you did a great job with it! :)

I can't wait to see mine either, too bad I have no idea what I'm going to write, :/

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
:iconkittyrose:
I can imagine. At least you succeded :)

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And I believe this may call for a proper introduction, and well
Don't you see, I'm the narrator, and this is just the prologue?
Panic! at the Disco
:iconjustsomedude86:
That does look pretty difficult to line up the text like that.

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