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In the black-dead silence
of an oak-dead coffin
a hundred hateful caterpillars feast on soft flesh.
After gorging through a succulent calf one opts for an escape:
Drills a wormhole through wood walls,
and burrows upwards emerging convict style
into cool spring air.
It squirms like a sleeping bag, up-across a headstone,
before folding within, forming a crust.
It hibernates in the engraved words:
"age five”

On a summer morning
she stirs with a quick twitch,
squirting out from her crisped bed-clothes to unfold;
shaking herself dry like a tea-towel.
Two sulphur-shaded leaves tremor
either side of a filament-thin body.
Six pin feet hook-hold the basking granite stone.
Drying antlers flex like coils, measuring.
She flips into the air like a loose sheet of paper
and drifts which-ever way on a morning breeze.

The music of traffic attracts her as the music of house-parties attracts teenagers.
She finds herself dallying on a swishing motorway.
"That thing." Speeding motorists remark to their empty passenger seats,
"Has no chance!"
But she flits over juggernauts,
dances past vans
and surfs over slip-streams
as flies, wasps and midges dash themselves to liquid on stained windscreens.

She spots him weaving
amidst this metallic bull run.
He spies her too.
They wing towards each other, dodging vehicles offhandedly.
Flirting, tickling, touching,
joining.
She quivers beneath him. Savouring.
Now he wafts exhausted
into the humming air and hovers a paused farewell,
before diving headlong into the first 'O' of VOLVO.

Unabashed, she catches her breath and re-catches the air,
rising much higher this time above the swashing convoy.
Gravitating towards the hazy silhouette of the town,
she finds a busy main road.
Alighting a fence post she waits for a potential site to
lay her eggs.

Two women waffle, rooted in the pavement,
as a child dawdles, bored, unseen, around her mum's tree trunk legs.
She looks up and sees those shining buttercup wings
dancing a salutation.
She extends an ankle-thin arm
hand outstretched
and offers a landing pad.
The wings accept,
dropping like a whisper onto her trusting palm
as her new friend.
But the wings fling themselves airwards once more
and hover
but just out of reach.
She follows those fairy-wings:
One step.
Two steps.
Her mother turns to see her daughter dreaming in the road
and seizes her back
by the ponytail, out of a howling bus-lane.

Two yellow wings beat harder from frustration
before calming, and she re-settles on the fence post
with the consolation of future prey.
©2006-2009 `AbCat
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Okay. Much praise must go to *salshep for this. Her critique of an earlier draft pointed out some dreadful mistakes which, hopefully, have been ironed out.
This was originally inspired by a drive to Ledbury. Near Bristol I spotted a yellow butterfly flying across a dual carriageway and it set in mind a train of thoughts. Three weeks later this is the result. Once again nature turning bad. First the crow and now this!

For the David Attenborough types amoung you, check out the mating ritual, which is designed to select those of the species most adept at dodging traffic, and thus most adept at tempting someone into the road with out being killed itself.
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Ooh, that naughty butterfly. This has a wonderfully enticing opening, a captivating middle and an eerily beautiful ending. Lovely lovely!

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Fading bells -
now musky blossoms
peal in dusk.

Literary babblings.
Who knew butterflies could be such horrifying monsters!
I am glad the child was saved - being a mother I don't think I could have stood it otherwise.
For me at least, you have succeeded in scaring me big time.

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THIS IS THE GATE OF HEAVEN. ENTER YE ALL BY THIS DOOR. (This door is kept locked because of the draught - please use side door.)
Yes, I couldn't kill a kid in my poem so that part of the life-cycle was left out. I'm just too squeamish!
I am glad to hear it! :)

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THIS IS THE GATE OF HEAVEN. ENTER YE ALL BY THIS DOOR. (This door is kept locked because of the draught - please use side door.)
Wow, this tightened up really well! It's right up there with my favourite stories, lol, so damned creepy!

This was great revision:

It hibernates in the engraved words:
"age five”

My only nit left is : (so close), ... 'frustration' and the scene negate the need to say that so specifically. :D Terrible person, aren't I??

Anyways, firmly planted on my list of faves. Well done!

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<salshep> <ordie>I should wite something awsome
<salshep> It's true
<ordie> You're write. That's my one-size-fits-all reort.

#Cabal. Because someone needs to be.
Oh and PS: The title rawks, couldn't have been better.

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<salshep> <ordie>I should wite something awsome
<salshep> It's true
<ordie> You're write. That's my one-size-fits-all reort.

#Cabal. Because someone needs to be.
Hmmm "So close" You're right that the need to say it is negated but I want it there anyway, just to further humanise the butterfly's exasperation.
I'm well pleased that you enjoyed it. From what I've seen of you on the workshops that is high praise indeed. I'm glad you like the title too.
Thanks so much for all your help on this one. :hug:
Wow that was some awesome stuff. Strangely wants me to look at butterflies. lol

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